Friday Fictioneers is a challenge wherein you write a Story in 100 Words based on a photo prompt:
Just one more step, she surmised, until she reached the edge. Still lucid, she considered the horrendous pain she'd feel before the blackness enveloped her. It couldn’t be worse than the cumulative anguish she'd already experienced. Those seven years of wretched, alcoholic despair had degraded her ability to function and think clearly. She shivered. Was her cheek wet from overspray or tears? The breathtaking Bridal Falls the only witness to the chaos in her mind. “C’mon Josie,” Mother called. “Enough of those murder mysteries, you’ll be late for school.” Josie bolted downstairs marking the page as she closed the book. Word Count: 100
Great! I wasn’t expecting that ending.
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That’s the challenge. Coming up with an unexpected ending, Anne.
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You did it perfectly.
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Thanks so much
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Well done! Tight, intriguing, and twisted!
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Thank you Nancy.
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Surprising ending 😁
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Wow, you said it well and only in 100 words. Shows less is more. Excellent.
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I am working on the show don’t tell method. Still needs more refining but 100 words is a good limit.
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Good start indeed. I think I’ll join the 100 word challenge again as soon as I’m feeling well again. The coming week I’m doing another 5 days on writing childrens picture books(it’s free thats why I’m doing it) The info is only 24 hours on line to listen en make notes. Then also the time zone is a bit of a problem because they start midnight our time and I have to catch next morning here before they take it off. I’m kind of used by now working like that on line.
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The bane of living at this end of the world is the time difference. I have gotten up at 3am for online art classes.
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I know, I try to use those who have a replay afterwards but most of the time you need to be a member to receive the replay and then you also have to pay for membership.
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Hope you are feeling better soon, Ineke!
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Thank you Amanda. Feeling better but not hundred percent.
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Take it easy!
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Whew! I’m glad it was just a novel! Good job!
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I was concerned that this might trigger some folks, so I hope they read through til the end.
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Wow! Really well written. That ending!
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Thanks, Happy Panda. I am really glad you found it so. That compliment is much appreciated. I don’t find writing concise short stories easy and hope I am improving.
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Clever! Nice twist at the end.
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I am glad you thought so, Margaret. Stories this short need a punchy ending!
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Great stuff. A good book inspires and holds children’s imagination, spellbound.
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Indeed it does. Thanks James.
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Wow, what an ending.
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Thanks, Peggy. Your comment made me smile. Job done!
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Quite a twist. Well done.
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🙂 Thank you. You made me smile. Very much appreciated
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I am glad I could make you smile, Amanda. 🙂
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Me too, Bridget!
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A wonderfully clever story. Well done.
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Hi Bill, Welcome to my blog. Thanks for stopping by and leaving a kind comment! It is much appreciated.
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Very entertaining story!
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Thanks so much Sadje! I appreciate that comment.
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You’re most welcome Amanda
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👍
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Hah, there I was, commiserating with the heroine and then, wham, what a twist! Great fun.
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If you felt that while reading it, Gah, I guess I achieved the aim of the story! Thanks so much.
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I am glad this scene was just a story she was reading, hopefully a story with a redeeming ending.
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Possibly – the ending as yet unwritten!
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An unexpected twist. Well done.
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Thanks Sandra for the comment and the visit! Do you participate in the Friday Fictioneers on a regular basis?
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Well, not as often as I used to. I started probably around 12 years ago and for a long time I was in most weeks, but the last two or three years, not so much so.
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Whew, you had me worried. Powerful writing!
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I was concerned it may have been too confronting for readers so it was just as well I was nearing the word count limit and had to end the story.
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Well done! Love the ending.
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Thanks so much. I had hoped to surprise folks.
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Lots of tension and potential disaster in this. I’m so glad it all disappeared with the closing of a book. However, if Josie is like most other school kids, there’s probably just as much tension and drama at home as Mum (or Dad) tries to get everyone up and about.
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It is so true that there is always loads of tension and drama in a house where adolescents live. Reading is one occupation that usually is not associated with too many problems. Nevertheless I was concerned my story was getting quite dark so I sought to lighten it up somewhat by making it a fictional tale. I appreciate your comment. Thanks so much.
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Magic of reading. You get lost in different world. Good story
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That is a lovely comment. Much appreciate Vartika. Reading is the best tonic for the mind.
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Books have the ability to transport us to places we could otherwise only imagine. I must say, the ending came as quite a relief!
Here’s mine!
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Thanks for the link, Keith and welcome to StPA. I haven’t had time to visit all the FF entries yet and the list grows longer each day! I agree with you about books and will go visit your story post now.
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Dear Amanda,
That was certainly a relief. Nicely done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thank you Rochelle. I hope I didn’t frighten you?
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You like my story. Thanks for reblogging my content.
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The young student likes to read mature themes. Good story with an unexpected twist.
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Thanks so much for your response. That is encouraging.
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You’re very welcome.
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Clever. This rings true. I loved reading “adult” stories before I was supposed to.
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I imagine teenage Ally either frequenting a local library regularly or collecting a little library of your own, at home?
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Both!
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I love and also hate endings like this! Almost kind of like if in the last boom of the Harry Potter series he just woke up in the closet under the stairs and everything was a dream. Great writing! Super descriptive.
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Thank you Mary. I know what you mean.
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I want more, Amanda! That was fantastic and I wasn’t expecting the ending hahah. 🙂
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Hey, thanks so much. I thought it might be too indigestible for some!
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Very nice. Unexpected ending. Da best.
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Thanks, Brian.
Astrid
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🙏🏻
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what a phenomenal blog !!
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Thank you. Where are you located?
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Very good! It drew me in and loved the surprise ending!
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Thank you, Joy! Much appreciated.
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😊
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Enjoyed a lot.. Thank you 😊
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Thanks for visiting and your lovely comment.
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Nice😊 Very entertaining story
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Thank you.
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Nicely written!!
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Thank you Saania Sparkle !
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Intriguing!
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