Write a fiction story in 100 words or less based on the photo prompt. Trigger warning- this short story is dark.
Explaining Why
Bad day? Rindango asked, his open palm offering another refill.
I nod, saying nothing.
How could I explain, without opening the floodgates?
Suppressing the steel ball of anxiety wedged in my breastbone way preferable to divulging the wretched hurt and misunderstanding. It’s safer staying distant. Numb. Protected behind a wall.
I dropped my guard once. The do-gooder’s sympathetic response well-intentioned, albeit transient. Too confronting and they walk. Excuses made. Resetting their unremarkable life.
I left normal behind years ago.
So why change now? It’s my problem, my ownership, my solution.
I signal to Rindango. One more for the road, thanks.
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62 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers”
In the future, don’t say ‘trigger warning’ for fiction. Just let people be shocked and surprised. I always do – but I’m weird like that.
I have a very short story on my blog with a deliberately-shocking finale. My mother was the first person to read it. I had printed it up for her, and afterwards, she rolled up the papers and hit me over the head with it. “Don’t scare your mother like that!” she said. But she liked it nonetheless.
Good Writing, a bit confusing to me but well written. ( I nod, saying nothing. I nod means that you said nothing; you don’t need “saying nothing”. Only my meaning.)
Good point. Saying nothing is an oxymoron and unnecessary. I could have just written. I merely nod? Would that convey the feeling better? Or I nod, but cannot speak. That was the feeling I wanted to convey.
Oxymoron is a fun English word. I appreciate the feedback Ineke! It is really useful. Are you feeling back to your usual self? I am now struggling post covid.
You are welcome. Yesterday was the first time that I could see a dr after my issues with high bloodpresure and fast heartbeat. All after effects from Covid which I had half March. I still feel tired at times. Doctor said I’ve got to slow down because of my age. Looking after grandchildren isn’t a easy task. It really takes long to get over it. When you feel tired you just have to rest that’s all that’s going to help to recover.
Grandchildren are exhausting but who cam deny they are delightful. I hope the Dr was and to offer some treatment that helps. Be gentle with yourself and nap more!
I agree, the little ones need a helping hand and that’s when grannies come in handy. I’m napping after lunch but sometimes it doesn’t help. Just can’t relax enough. Was two weeks school holidays. Monday things are going to be in a slower pace(hope so) I would love to do some painting and some writing again. Going to start another six weeks from 15 Aug to color in your sentences with all kinds of interesting (descriptive) words.
This is what it’s all about: “fun with sensory descriptions and specifics that keep good scenes going” There are only ten in the group and we get information from tutor and we discuss the writing we’ve done for each week.
Thank you. Fiction stories don’t come naturally for me, Bridget. This practice forces me to think in a fictitious way and as the slogan says, you make every word count!
It curtails my sometimes rambling verbose style!
Beautiful writing, the mood comes through perfectly. Trigger warnings are always good although ‘dark…’ no idea if someone is triggered by that. I’m surprised by good plot twists, not the mood.
Because of my background as a psychotherapist, I couldn’t resist trying to analyze your MC. A do-gooder who went too far? Someone who wants to fix everyone else, but doesn’t take a good long look at his own motives?
In any case, an interesting character sketch, well done in very few words.
I didn’t completely realise when I wrote this, that I was so clearly referencing that barrier of psychological trauma that leads to withdrawal behind a wall. But I think that is exactly what I felt about this sorrowful, broken character.
Okay, the first paragraph is interesting. I wish I can write a short story about that prompt photo but I can’t, I have no clue how to begin writing 100 words based on that photo. Anyways, great blog ‘Friday Fictioneers”🙌🙌
Maybe the next prompt photo will give me an idea of how to tackle that assignment
It is a fiction story Mthobisi. Just tell a story that is made up or based on something in your life. What does the photo remind you of? An anecdote of your life? Something you saw or heard? Just pure fantasy. A story of your imagination. As long as it has a beginning a middle and an end, it is a story! The word limit makes you utilize every word that you choose to use.
In the future, don’t say ‘trigger warning’ for fiction. Just let people be shocked and surprised. I always do – but I’m weird like that.
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Yes I vacillated over whether to add that or not….
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I prefer to be warned.
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I agree 😉
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I have a very short story on my blog with a deliberately-shocking finale. My mother was the first person to read it. I had printed it up for her, and afterwards, she rolled up the papers and hit me over the head with it. “Don’t scare your mother like that!” she said. But she liked it nonetheless.
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The aim (a story that shocked) was achieved!
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Hahaha! Maybe your mother you can warn 😉
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I never did, but another one of my stories made her anxious.
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🙂
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Good Writing, a bit confusing to me but well written. ( I nod, saying nothing. I nod means that you said nothing; you don’t need “saying nothing”. Only my meaning.)
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Good point. Saying nothing is an oxymoron and unnecessary. I could have just written. I merely nod? Would that convey the feeling better? Or I nod, but cannot speak. That was the feeling I wanted to convey.
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But cannot speak gives a better feeling of the situation. Oxymoron(big word for me, thanks for telling me. I still miss out on the Eng usage!)
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Oxymoron is a fun English word. I appreciate the feedback Ineke! It is really useful. Are you feeling back to your usual self? I am now struggling post covid.
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You are welcome. Yesterday was the first time that I could see a dr after my issues with high bloodpresure and fast heartbeat. All after effects from Covid which I had half March. I still feel tired at times. Doctor said I’ve got to slow down because of my age. Looking after grandchildren isn’t a easy task. It really takes long to get over it. When you feel tired you just have to rest that’s all that’s going to help to recover.
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Grandchildren are exhausting but who cam deny they are delightful. I hope the Dr was and to offer some treatment that helps. Be gentle with yourself and nap more!
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I agree, the little ones need a helping hand and that’s when grannies come in handy. I’m napping after lunch but sometimes it doesn’t help. Just can’t relax enough. Was two weeks school holidays. Monday things are going to be in a slower pace(hope so) I would love to do some painting and some writing again. Going to start another six weeks from 15 Aug to color in your sentences with all kinds of interesting (descriptive) words.
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Is that a challenge of sorts, Ineke, to colour in your sentences? It sounds interesting.
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This is what it’s all about: “fun with sensory descriptions and specifics that keep good scenes going” There are only ten in the group and we get information from tutor and we discuss the writing we’ve done for each week.
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That sounds great. Especially that you get feedback.
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Perfectly accurate written just as it is… ❤
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Thank you Ruth. I appreciate that more than you know!
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One for the road often works.
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As long as you are not driving!
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It’s beautifully written, you are quite a wordsmith, Amanda.
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Thank you. Fiction stories don’t come naturally for me, Bridget. This practice forces me to think in a fictitious way and as the slogan says, you make every word count!
It curtails my sometimes rambling verbose style!
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I participated at the Friday Fictioneers for a while. It was fun.
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It is a good practice.
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Beautiful writing, the mood comes through perfectly. Trigger warnings are always good although ‘dark…’ no idea if someone is triggered by that. I’m surprised by good plot twists, not the mood.
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I vacillated about whether to include a trigger warning or not. I erred on the side of caution but perhaps it wasn’t necessary.
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Earning on the side of caution is always good.
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I enjoyed this! It’s amazing what one can convey in just 100 words.
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With such a small word count each word must earn its place, Dorothy but it does teach you how to say something without always spelling it out!
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Because of my background as a psychotherapist, I couldn’t resist trying to analyze your MC. A do-gooder who went too far? Someone who wants to fix everyone else, but doesn’t take a good long look at his own motives?
In any case, an interesting character sketch, well done in very few words.
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Trust is very personal and sometimes it is best to say nothing.
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Some trust more easily than others. Understanding and being non-judgemental is much rarer.
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So true.
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Dear Amanda,
Often less is more and a nod is enough. Nicely done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thanks. I shall remember that Rochelle. And no trigger warnings for fiction – in future.
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Interesting story about internal ponderings. Nicely done.
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Thank you Bill. In these pandemic times, I think feeling like these might be more common than we think.
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Dark indeed
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Dark stories are easier to write
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Perhaps
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This was beautifully written, Amanda.
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Thanks so much
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My pleasure 🙂
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Perhaps not tonight, but I think one day they will open up to Randingo.
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There is always hope. He seemed to be a constant in her life.
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I think I see nothing, but I perceive the flow of something in the wild midst of nothing.
Knowledge flows❤️
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I am not sure I understand your drift, Franco. Can you clarify?
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I mean I didn’t understand the post, yet there is natural knowledge in the drawing.
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Just another brick in the wall… Perhaps no more for the road, not one more…
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I didn’t completely realise when I wrote this, that I was so clearly referencing that barrier of psychological trauma that leads to withdrawal behind a wall. But I think that is exactly what I felt about this sorrowful, broken character.
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Creative spin on the photo. I agree it works literally and as metaphor.
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Thank you! Your comment is much appreciated.
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Nice photo
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It isn’t mine. Photo credit is captioned. It was the prompt.
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Okay, the first paragraph is interesting. I wish I can write a short story about that prompt photo but I can’t, I have no clue how to begin writing 100 words based on that photo. Anyways, great blog ‘Friday Fictioneers”🙌🙌
Maybe the next prompt photo will give me an idea of how to tackle that assignment
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It is a fiction story Mthobisi. Just tell a story that is made up or based on something in your life. What does the photo remind you of? An anecdote of your life? Something you saw or heard? Just pure fantasy. A story of your imagination. As long as it has a beginning a middle and an end, it is a story! The word limit makes you utilize every word that you choose to use.
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Its a well-told story, saying so much in so few words. Well done!
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Thank you Fleur! All too familiar a story to those with an addictive personality.
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You are welcome, and very true!
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