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The Forbidden Cellar – Friday Fiction

PHOTO PROMPT © Roger Bultot

It is not easy to tell a story in 100 words.

If you are up for the challenge, head to Rochelle’s blog and join in. Here is my take on the photo prompt:

The Forbidden Cellar

She thought it was wrong. She blamed her curiosity and the estate lawyer who insisted her father deemed it necessary to return.

Hearing the music had drawn her in. A melody that lingered in her mind. Foggy half-buried memories propelled her down the dark stairs to the forbidden cellar.

The mustiness scalded her nostrils. When her eyes adjusted to the darkness, she understood.

The half-starved musician’s all-too-familiar features and ankle chains revealed the terrible family secrets.

“I knew you’d release me after the master died. Daughter, now we can be free. The Master named you in his will, didn’t he?”

100 words

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40 thoughts on “The Forbidden Cellar – Friday Fiction”

    1. Flash fiction is fun and a good exercise in making writing more succinct. It does leave the reader somewhat hanging though. However, I don’t feel I equipped enough to write a longer story for these complex characters.

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      1. I followed the Friday Fictioneers for about one year. Wrote a post every week, but then, after a while, there were just too many pictures I didn’t care for and many of the posts sounded the same. So I got bored and left.

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        1. I agree the flash fiction could get repetitive after a while and sometimes I can’t think of anything to write about the photo. For now, I will join in every now and again. Definitely not every week. When my U3A classes start again, my fiction writing will shift away from the fictioneers. I find the word limit is helpful.

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  1. What an intriguing story! The release of the musician should be a happy ending, but the feeling I’m left with is what if the girl is like the the Master? He chose her as his heir, after all…

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    1. Now that is an excellent point, Penny and I don’t know the characters well enough yet to be certain of their personalities. We are just getting acquainted! Lol. It could go either way. I might have to use them in another story to find out myself!
      Thanks for your thought-provoking comment.

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  2. Amanda, a terrific piece and I’ve got goosebumps already! Well written and you create a great sense of atmosphere in very few words. As others have mentioned, one just wants to read on!

    Thanks for linking to Rochelle and I might very well try one myself!

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    1. Thanks so much for the compliment about the story, Annika. That means a lot to me coming from you.
      The flash fiction is a good discipline. I feel it helps me become more succinct and precise in my wording. Eliminating lots of fluff. In 100 words, there isn’t time to flesh out a full story but it can give you the bones of, or introduction to, a longer story!

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